English Composition I Assignment 8

Task	Comments	Due Date	Points Possible	Points Earned	Your Grade

Phase 4 Individual Project

Mon (8/10)

150

148

A

Grade Comments:

Jennifer, it was a pleasure having you in my class this session. I can see improvement in your work. You conveyed your message well in your work. Little more organization was needed. Please take what you learned from this class and apply it to the next one. Feedback is given for each aspect of your assignment below: Paragraph 1: What skills can you apply from this class to future courses at Colorado Technical University Online? You addressed this question correctly and provide detailed information. Great Job! (30/30) Paragraph 2: In what ways can the ability to write an organized and informative essay help you in your work outside of school? You addressed this section correctly as well. Way to go! (30/30) Paragraph 3: What have you learned about the idea of “audience” as a result of this academic experience, and why does knowing one’s audience matter? You discussed the requirements in this section as well. Well Done! (30/30) Paragraph 3: Why does excellence in writing matter as much as excellence in any other field of study? You also addressed this section correctly as well. (30/30) Overall/Grammar/Format/Readability/Intro/Conclusion/Length 3-4 Overall I was very pleased with the quality of your work. Your assignment was easy to read and understand. You assignment had “flow” and logic to it. You had a intro and a conclusion. You also met the length requirement. Your assignment was formatted correctly as well. I noticed some of your sentence were not structure correctly. I know you will continue to work on this in your future courses.Other than that, awesome job! 28/30 Score: 148/150

My comments:

Wow, this teacher was tough, but I made the grade!

English Composition I Assignment 7

Task	Comments	Due Date	Points Possible	Points Earned	Your Grade

Phase 4 Discussion Board

Fri (8/7)

100

99

A

Grade Comment:

Jennifer, great intro and conclusion. You did an awesome job on this assignment. You provided some good content in your work. Feedback is given for each aspect of your assignment below: Paragraph 1: List three significant changes in your writing as a result of your experience with the drafting process. You listed 3 significant changes in your writing here and provided good information. Well Done! (15/15) Paragraph 2: While critiquing your fellow students’ essays, what did you learn about your own writing habits? Describe at least one example and how it will assist you in future papers. You provided detailed information here as well. Great Job! (15/15) Paragraph 3: Take one passage from one of your early drafts, describe the changes you made, and explain why you made them. You provided a passage her from your orginal work. Great Job(15/15) Paragraph 4: Discuss the biggest writing challenge you will want to master for future courses, and explain why this is the case? You addressed this section correctly. Way to Go! (15/15) Peer Postings: You provided substantive feedback to your classmates. Awesome Job!(20/20) Overall/Grammar/Format/Readability/Intro/Conclusion/Length 3-4 I was pleased with the overall quality of your work. Your assignment was formatted correctly. Your assignment was easy to read and understand. I did see see a small intro and a conclusion in your work. You did meet the page length requirement. I did notice a few small grammar mistakes in your work(sentence structure). 19/20 Score: 99/100

Woohoo!

English Composition I Assignment 6

Task	Comments	Due Date	Points Possible	Points Earned	Your Grade

Phase 3 Individual Project

Tue (8/4)

300

298

A

Grade Comment:

Jennifer, thank you for turning in your assignment on time. You did an outstanding job on this assignment. I can see improvement in your work. You meet all the assignment requirements in your revision. Feedback is giving for each aspect of your assignment. Clear and concise introduction.: You provided clear and concise. Great Job! (50/50) Descriptive body paragraphs that clearly outline the subject and elaborate upon it. This should not be regurgitated information but should demonstrate critical thinking. Your body paragraphs very organized and detailed. Awesome Job! (100/100) Conclusion that wraps the essay up: Your conclusion wrapped up the entire essay. Great Job. (50/50) Grammar Mechanics. I noticed very little grammar mistakes in your work (sentence structure). Other than that great job! (48/50) Formatting (title page, double-spaced, header). (10/10) Readability. Your assignment was easy to read and understand. Fantastic Job! (15/15) Length (2-5) pages: You met the page length requirement. Awesome Job! (10/10) Improvement from previous drafts: I can see tremendous improvement in your work. Fantastic Job! (15/15) Total: 298/300

My Comments:

Revision is always important when revisiting an assignment. Thankfully, I have been able to provide what was expected of me. Mama’s gotta brand new bag!!! Owwaaa!

English Composition I Assignment 5

Task	Comments	Due Date	Points Possible	Points Earned	Your Grade

Phase 3 Discussion Board

Tue (7/28)

100

18

F

Grade Comment:

Jennifer, thank you for submitting your assignment on time. I would have like to seen more of the assignment requirements met in your work. I went over this assignment in live chat 6. Please see live chat 6 for assignment clarification. It is also important to read the task list fully and ask questions or visit the chat if you do not understand the assignment requirements. Paragraph 1: Explained whether the essay has a focused introduction that sets the stage for the discussion to follow and whether the introduction draws the interest of readers and offers an identifiable thesis. The assignment requirements were not met here. I went over this information in live chat 6. 0/20 Paragraph 2: Explained whether the body paragraphs offer clear topic sentences, focused supporting evidence that responds to each topic sentence, and smooth transitions. The assignment requirements were not met here. I went over this information in live chat 6. 0/20 Paragraph 3: Explained whether the essay offers a convincing, well-developed conclusion that leaves the reader with something to think about and a believable call to action. The assignment requirements were not met here. I went over this information in live chat 6. 0/20 Paragraph 4: Provided a summary of impression of the overall organization of the paper. What were your overall impressions of the organization of the paper? The requirements were not met here. 0/10 Provided suggestions for improvement: No suggestions were provided in peer critiques. you provided a little feedback to you classmate but it was not a full critique. 3/10 Submission of daft for critiquing (main post): Main draft was posting for other students to critique. 10/10 Grammar/Readability/Length/Format: You assignment did not meet the task list requirements. The information you did provided was easy to read and understand. I did not notice any grammar mistakes in the information you did provided. Your assignment was formatted correctly. The 3-4 paragraphs length requirement for each peer critique was not met. 5/10 total: 18/100

My Comments:

Ok, this revision did not go as well as I had planned, but there is always room for improvement.

English Composition I Assignment 4

Phase 2 Individual Project

Task	Comments	Due Date	Points Possible	Points Earned	Your Grade

Phase 2 Individual Project

Tue (7/21)

100

86

B+

Grade Comment:

Jennifer, Great job turning in your assignment on time. I would have liked to have seen more revision in your work. You may want to go back and revisit the task list requirement for phase 1IP and Phase 2IP. Feedback is given for each part of your assignment below: Part A: Create a thesis (if you haven’t already) and insert it at the end of your introduction. I did not see a proper thesis in your work. Remember the thesis is the last sentence of the first paragraph. The task list gave an example and I went over this in the live chat. . Also the intro paragrah needs to meet the phase 1IP requirement. You will need to revise this in order to recieve credit on your phase 3IP. I went over some possible examples in live chat 6. 5/10 Part B: Be sure all body paragraphs open with topic sentences. You will need to have topic sentence that reflects your thesis. For this first body paragraph you need topic sentence along the lines of the task list requirement. Hint:The first body paragraph deals with qualites of a good educational source so your min-thesis/opening topics should have those details in it. Your second body paragraph identifes your two sources along with your examples. I’m not for sure why you are going on and one about the topic swinging. This is not a research paper but an explanatory paper about the qualites of a good educattional resource and finding two possible educational sources along with examples. For example, if your source is the internet, the example will be a website. You need topic sentence that reflects that information. More organization and clarity was needed. 15/20 Part C: Find specific examples from your sources that illustrate the important educational qualities and weave them into your essay as supporting evidence. Remember, the first body paragraph should discussions the qualities of a good source and you second paragraph list two source and two examples. You did list two examples for this requirement. More organization would be needed for your phase 3IP. You want to stick with two sources throughout your work. You had some many so sources and examples in your work it made it confusing. You don’t want to overwhelm the reader 20/20 Part D: Close each body paragraph with a sentence that completes the thought of that paragraph. You had closing sentence on some of your body paragraphs. 10/10 Part E: Ensure that your concluding paragraph offers the reader at least four sentences of thoughtful analysis explaining why one source is the best educational resource. Your last paragraph which is the conclusion paragraph should have had a discussion on which one of the two resources you considered to be the best educational source. More revision/organization/clarity is needed here. 8/10 Part F: Track Changes Format: 10/10 Part E: Grammar Mechanics: I notice some grammar mistakes with (sentence structure and fragments). 8/10 Part G: Readability. Your assignment was easy to read and understand for the most part. 5/5 Part H: Length (at least 1 / 2 a page longer than your P1IP). The length requirement was met. Great job! 5/5 Total: 86/100

Jennifer Korol

Colorado Technical University Online

Bachelor’s (BSIT) Software Systems Engineering

English Composition I Assignment 3

Phase 2 Discussion Board

Task	Comments	Due Date	Points Possible	Points Earned	Your Grade

Phase 2 Discussion Board

Fri (7/17)

75

51

D+

Grade Comment:

revised: Jennifer, you submitted your assignment on time, great work! Feedback is given for each part of your assignment below: Part1: Identify the resources you have used: What is meant by revision, and what are the important steps in the revision process? I’m for sure if you fully understood what this assignment asked for. You started discussion resources you used, which is part 1 of the question. Then the second part asked you: What revision means and what are the important steps. You had an overload of information when you talked about the resources you used. Then you stated “Revising the first paragraph is a progressive step toward helping the reader and I to understand what topic my thesis is going to uncover.”The introduction is the first paragraph and it lets the reader know what topic you will cover in your work(it also includes the thesis statement). Then you stated talked about rough drafts. This is not what the assignment asked for. Majority of your sources were about rough drafts. In additional to the resources you have used, I needed to see a simple discussion (in a separate paragraph) on revision means along with the steps in the revision process. 10/20 I was looking more information such as the following: To revise your paper means to see your paper again with fresh eyes to make the ideas and main idea of your paper clearer to your reader. Because the purpose of revision is making the meaning clearer, revision involves much more than changing a few words here and there in your paper or correcting spelling and grammar errors. Revision involves focusing on whole paper/deep paper issues that affect a paper’s meaning; it involves adding information, ideas, and details, deleting information and details that don’t develop the main idea and the meaning, and reorganizing key elements in the paper. There are several steps to the revision process. Part 2: Why is writing a strong introduction an important step in writing an effective essay? You briefly touched on introduction in your work but it did not meet the requirements. More clarity and focus was needed here to demonstrate you understood what the question was asking for. You also talked about five steps to creating a first draft of a thesis and this is not what the task list asked for. You must follow directions because we only grade by the task list deliverables. 6/10 Part 3: How have these Writing Center resources helped you to understand revision and to prepare you for the revision process? More details and clarity was needed here regarding the task list question. Here you talked more about drafting and tips for drafting and this is not what the question asked for. 7/10 Peer Postings: You provide feedback to your classmates. Remember it must be substantive and at least 3 to 4 sentences. 8/10 Overall Format, Length (3Paragraphs) Readability & Grammar : Your assignment was formatted correctly. Your assignment was easy to read and understand although it did not fully address the requirements. I did notice a few grammar errors in your work (sentence structure, sentence fragment and punctuations). You did meet the 3 paragraph requirements in your work. The APA was not cited correctly in your work but I did not count off for it. (please don’t put Professor)20/25 total 51/75

Jennifer Korol

Colorado Technical University Online

Bachelor’s (BSIT) Software Systems Engineering

English Composition I Assignment 2

Phase 1 Individual Project

Task	Comments	Due Date	Points Possible	Points Earned	Your Grade

Phase 1 Individual Project

Tue (7/14)

100

88

B+

Grade Comment:

Jennifer, good job submitting your assignment on time. I can see improvement in your work. Feedback is given for each part of the assignment. Part 1: Introductory paragraph: Identify the hobby or interest and discuss why it interests you. You did a great job explaining your hobby/interest here and discussing why it is important to you. Great job, refining your topic. (10/10) Parrt 2: Body paragraph: Discussion/define on the qualities that would make a source about your hobby or interest an excellent educational resource. You provided good information here and discussed many qualities of a good resource 15/15 Part 3:Body paragraph: Discussion on at least two possible sources that you have found that could teach you about the hobby or interest. You indentified two possible resources that will help you learn more about your interest. You would want to revise this part for phase 2IP. This information should give the reader more information on how the resource can teach you about the topic only. You may want to select an item from the website that can be considered educational. You would not want to put information that would lessen the crediablity of a source. Other than that great job. 30/30 Part 4: Closing paragraph: Explanation of why these sources are educational sources. This section was not addressed fully. . The question asked you to explain what makes the both resources you have identified educational resource. You talked about the one of them and other items. 10/15 Remember there should be no new nformation in the conclusion area. Overall Format (Clear introduction, body, conclusion, indent paragraphs, double-space, and title page, margins are set to 1 inch). Length (4-6 paragraphs) Readability/Grammar/Spelling. Items not included: . Everything was included in regards to formatting. You met the length requirement. Your assignment was easy to understand for the most part. I did notice a few grammar mistakes. Paragraph: punctuation, some sentences were structured incorrectly. Other than that, great work 23/30 total: 88/100

Jennifer Korol

Colorado Technical University Online

Bachelor’s (BSIT) Software Systems Engineering

English Composition I Assignment 1

Phase 1 Discussion Board 1

Task	Comments	Due Date	Points Possible	Points Earned	Your Grade
Phase 1 Discussion Board		Fri (7/10)	75	65	B+

Grade Comment:

Jennifer, thank you for submitting your work on time. You had a lot of good information in your work. You will have the opportunity to improve your grammar mechanics. Feedback is given for the follow parts of your assignment. Remember this is an English course so grammar is weighed more. Paragraph 1: You identified your topic of interest here and you let me know why its of interest toyou. Great Work. 10/10 Paragraph 2: You provided some good information here. More clarity and details in regards to the task list requirements were needed here. Remember a paragraph is 4 to 6 sentences. 8/10 Paragraph 3: You provided good here as well. You identified some good sources and where you plan on finding them. Great work! 10/10 Peer Postings: You provided good feedback to your classmates. Great work! 10/10 Overall Format, Length (3Paragraphs) Readability & Grammar: You did meet the 3 paragraph requirement. I did notice few grammatical mistakes in your work. For example, sentence fragments, sentence structure, punctuation, word choice, just to name a few. I encourage you to visit the writing lab, chats and read the little brown book to improve your writing techniques. Your assignment was difficult to read in some area. Your assignment was formatted correctly. I’m looking forward to seeing improvement. 22/30 total: 65/75

Jennifer Korol

Colorado Technical University Online

Bachelor’s (BSIT)- Software Systems Engineering

ENG111 Class and Grades

For my English Composition 1 Class, I will be creating and revising an existing piece.  So, to publish each revision on here would only be redundant.  However, I will post my the grades and Instructor comments I receive for this class in the CTU Online Experience tab of my blog.

With that being said, I am a little behind with posting the assignments I have completed for my IT105 class due to aquiring work from a respected client.  I will make my best effort to keep all of you posted on my assignments as well as my grades.  Thank you for understanding

Jennifer Korol

Megapixel Productions – http://www.mymegapixelproductions.com and Colorado Tech University Student

A Brief Review Of My Second Session

IT105-0903A-37 : Information and Technology Literacy

Course Outline
This course will consist of 5 Phase(s) covering the following topics:

Phase  1: Online Student Environment Internet Browser Internet Browser components Login and passwords Navigation, information, header frames CTU home page components CTU online school areas of interest

Phase  2: Operating Systems The windows operating system and basic navigation Foreground and background concepts Running applications Getting help Document management File system structure Finding files Managing disks and storage Formatting disks Sharing files Printer management

Phase  3: Software Applications Productivity suites and Microsoft office Spreadsheets Advanced functions in spreadsheets Simple database management systems Structure of databases Reports Questions and answers regarding productivity suites and Microsoft office

Phase  4: Academic Research & Preparation of Papers APA style and standards Searching for information Topic and data collection Search terms Critical thinking

Phase  5: Basic Web Page Development Website structure HTML Browsers Layers, images and cascading style sheets User friendy websites Effectiveness of website Image types and HTML programming ENG111-0903A-40 : English Composition I Course Outline This course will consist of 4 Phase(s) covering the following topics: Phase  1: Fundamentals of Grammar Sentence Elements Parts of speech Revising Sentence fragments Revising Run-on sentences Creating Subject-Verb Agreement Using Adjectives and Adverbs effectively Editing to Correct Faulty Punctuation and Mechanics Spelling Phase  2: Researching and Citing Researching a Paper Learning about the Library Choosing a topic Bibliographies Taking notes Organizing and Outlining Ethics Writing the research paper Documenting Sources Preparing APA references Handling In-Text Citations Handling Quotations Avoiding Plagiarism Phase  3: Creating an essay Planning and Drafting the Paper Understanding the Assignment Zeroing in on a Topic Gathering information Organizing the Information Developing a Thesis Statement Writing the first draft Revising and Editing Revising Consider the Whole essay Paragraph Structure and Development Sharpening Sentences and Words Proofreading Your Draft Writing the Introduction and Conclusion Selecting a Title Using a computer to revise Having someone else check your work Portfolios Phase  4: Formatting with Word What is Formatting Word Processing Software Justification What is Formatting Word Processing Software Justification Title Page Spacing Font Header Footer Reference List Lists Title Page Spacing Font Header Footer Reference List Lists